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I. Registration Act
We had to stand
with the ones labeled 'colored',
homeless in our own country.
Don't look at the others.
II. Benches
The ones labeled 'colored';
they were for us.
Don't look at the others.
Not for you. No longer.
III. Reconciliation
They were for us.
We had to stand,
not for you; no longer
homeless in our own country.
We had to stand
with the ones labeled 'colored',
homeless in our own country.
Don't look at the others.
II. Benches
The ones labeled 'colored';
they were for us.
Don't look at the others.
Not for you. No longer.
III. Reconciliation
They were for us.
We had to stand,
not for you; no longer
homeless in our own country.
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The brevity of the work adds to the force of the speech. It will not help me much by way of criticism. I will need more substance to give a full critique. I assume from the stance that there is a black-white conflict as before, since 'colored' usually refers to African Americans. The stanza in italics, as an emphasis, is particularly keen. The 'homeless' here has referred to them for many years. I would like to see this with longer content and a heightened suspense for the conflict. Otherwise, it was well-written and I find no other weaknesses. You are of course free to follow my suggestion or ignore it.